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First Kiss by ~xspikex:iconxspikex:

Categories Literature > Poetry > Romantic > Mature Romance > Open




My lips graze your crimson ones, you virgin lips.
I reel back in shock, what have I done?
Have i taken your first kiss, the first time you kissed a boy?
And left your lips no longer virgin?
What have i done to you?

Am i worth it, your eyes reflect mine,
Shocked, scared, silent.
What to do now, i dont know.
Let's just continue.

Our lips connected again, I shudder as i accidentally taste your lipstick.
It's greasy, should i sandpaper your lips?
You deepen the kiss, gaining more experience.
I can hardly bear to breathe for the shame of breaking this
Wonderful thing, as my lips touch the heavens.

People rush past us, fading in a blur. I don't really care anymore
Because you're mine
Odd stares and harsh whispers float and change in to whitetrash.
I don't care anymore
Because your mine

We let go, for the sake of breathe,
Damnation be to that thing.
Spiralling down to reality, everythings seems so
Bland, yet again. Until another tryst.

You lean, tired against me. I silently wish I was more muscular
Your head seems to droop. Sighing softly
An 'I love you' vibrates from you.
Air catches in my throat, and I'll never forget
Your first kiss.
©2006-2009 ~xspikex
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Author's Comments

and my fingers are burnt so bear with me here.
i hate tawdry romance and i'm talking mature romances.
First kiss from a boys view point.

Also, Photograph from Kiss at City Hall by Frank Something.

Comments


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~shawna954 Jul 21, 2006, 5:20:39 PM
I think this poem gets better as it goes on. The first stanza almost threw me off, but once I kept reading, creativity began to come forth.
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~pallaviE Jul 21, 2006, 5:59:42 PM
its unique, from a boys point of view. somewhat more blunt. but not blunt. its hard to find a innocent guy, so its cool that you portrayed one. cool idea. :) i dont fav stuff that i dont like. stop whining and appreciate it. :P

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~xspikex Jul 21, 2006, 8:25:38 PM
how did it throw you off? is that a good or bad thing? ^^;

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And dreaming pick up from
The last place we left off
Your soft skin is weeping

A joy you can't keep it
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~shawna954 Jul 21, 2006, 9:16:24 PM
no, i like it. i think its good. i'm just saying it surprised me.
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~herliquidsapphires Jul 22, 2006, 10:03:58 PM
Haha, this is spectacular.

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~Ephodine Aug 13, 2006, 10:46:25 PM
Interesting concept here - a first kiss through the eyes of another. She is a virgin but he is not, in that sense.
I like it

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~Ryleah Aug 18, 2006, 6:49:43 PM
wow....very beautiful poem!! great work!!

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~bleebt Aug 18, 2006, 10:14:18 PM
real nice. i thought it was kinda korny at first, but then it got better and the feelings and emotions really shone through.

i can this is a piece of real emotion here, not worried about rhythm and timing and rhyming and thats good :) well done ;)

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~xspikex Aug 18, 2006, 11:35:19 PM
CORNY! ACCKK. haha. i thought so too. i try not to go near corny. but sigh. thanks anyways.

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And dreaming pick up from
The last place we left off
Your soft skin is weeping

A joy you can't keep it
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~bleebt Aug 19, 2006, 12:31:13 AM
it was only corny to start off with on first impression. but as you read you realise a much deeper and more interesting side to it. it is good and you should be proud, well done :)

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